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Wednesday, 9 November 2022

The Storm Shall Pass

There was a severe thunder-storm.

The day seemed like night.

There was no electricity.

She could barely see anything.

Photo Prompt- Dale Rogerson

The tree in the backyard crashed on her cottage.

There was dust everywhere.

Strong winds were on her face.

She fainted...

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"Now, slowly open your eyes..."

She found herself in a hospital.

"Are you feeling okay?" 

The young doctor’s voice sounded familiar.

She was measuring her pulse. 

The pretty doctor's face looked familiar too. 

She could not remember...

"Who brought me here?"

"I did."


"Do you know me?" she asked.

"Don't worry. All will be well, mother," the doctor said.


100 Words story for Friday Fictioneers

What do you think? Will she regain her memory?

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20 comments:

  1. Neil MacDonald9 November 2022 at 15:48

    Hopefully just a temporary concussion

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  2. Iain Kelly9 November 2022 at 15:52

    The fact she recognises him vaguely gives hope her memory will return.

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  3. Anonymous9 November 2022 at 16:05

    A great use of the prompt, that I enjoyed reading.

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  4. Viyoma9 November 2022 at 16:43

    Familiar voice - Familiar face & then that last line...too good!

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields9 November 2022 at 17:10

    Dear Anita,

    I like the slow reveal to the end. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Dale9 November 2022 at 18:32

    Oh my... that is such a difficult thing for everyone concerned. Well done, Anita.

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  7. A.B9 November 2022 at 18:33

    At least the doctor looks familiar to her. That's a good sign. Hopefully, she will regain her memory soon. Powerful story and the last line was the clincher, Anita.

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  8. Anonymous9 November 2022 at 19:29

    I love this. You kept the tension right up to the end, making it SUCH a relief to know who saved her :)

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  9. Liz Young9 November 2022 at 21:55

    This could almost be a metaphor for dementia.

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  10. JadeLi10 November 2022 at 01:57

    She's alive and being cared-for. I call that good news. Time will tell beyond that...

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  11. Anonymous10 November 2022 at 04:42

    Oh so nicely done. Well written.

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  12. Bill10 November 2022 at 20:41

    I enjoyed reading our story, Great structure and ending. :-)

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  13. Chioma11 November 2022 at 01:51

    Awww, sweet hopeful ending.

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  14. SG11 November 2022 at 10:53

    I think temporary loss of memory.

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  15. Angela11 November 2022 at 17:27

    Great story :)

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  16. Dahlia11 November 2022 at 18:13

    I am sure she will! Lovely little story :)

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  17. Andrea Robinson12 November 2022 at 14:58

    Very interesting. I want to see how it turns out. Well done.

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  18. Starsinclayjars12 November 2022 at 15:18

    Frightening!

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  19. Bernadette12 November 2022 at 22:52

    If things couldn't get any worse for her. Hopefully her memory will come back.

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  20. ashok14 November 2022 at 22:25

    Gripping!

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