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Thursday, 6 February 2020

Escalator

Rila was terrified of escalators.
She preferred taking the elevator instead.

That day he pulled her to the escalator.
“It’s not tough!”

Rila screamed, "Help! Stop it!"
Losing her balance, she fell on the ground.

She could see people, dressed in white, descending down the escalator and coming to where she lay.
PHOTO PROMPT - Ulrika Undén

"Rila! Are you okay?"
"It's all my fault! I'm so sorry, sweetheart! Get up!" 
"Dear God, please help!" she could hear his panic-stricken voice.

Rila then saw the same people, who looked like angels, ascending up the escalator and leaving.

"Open your eyes, Rila!" he begged.

She did!

100 Words story for Friday Fictioneers.
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14 comments:

  1. Neil MacDonald6 February 2020 at 17:33

    The important thing is not to look into the light

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  2. Penny Gadd6 February 2020 at 19:55

    You achieve good suspense with this story. I'm glad Rila pulled through. Perhaps her husband will be less of a bully in future.

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  3. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields6 February 2020 at 20:32

    Dear Anita,

    I'm a bit nervous on escalators as well. As a child I was downright terrified of them.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Dale6 February 2020 at 23:51

    Funny how some people are terrified of them...

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  5. Iain Kelly7 February 2020 at 00:17

    Thank goodness she opened her eyes at the end!

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  6. Solothefirst7 February 2020 at 02:23

    Wow! Good thing she opened he eyes. A scary moment

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  7. Keith's Ramblings7 February 2020 at 17:49

    It was the ending I hoped for. Phew!

    Here's mine!

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  8. C. E. Ayr7 February 2020 at 20:01

    I know people who won't use elevators, but all are cool on escalators

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  9. tedstrutz8 February 2020 at 00:28

    Fun story!

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  10. chasingbeans8 February 2020 at 14:17

    I like your Article.its Amazing.

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  11. Sandra Crook8 February 2020 at 17:50

    Turned out OK in the end, fortunately.

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  12. Viditi8 February 2020 at 23:20

    Nice suspense!

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  13. Linda11 February 2020 at 00:21

    I hope he got the bejeebers scared out of him. He's a bully!

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  14. Jade Li12 February 2020 at 01:33

    I'm glad heavenly help was coming. At least she knows what to expect when the real time comes. Good story!

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