Thursday, 29 January 2015

Abandon The Solitude

He was happy with his beautiful wife,
and enjoyed a carefree & blissful life.

Like a butterfly on a flower, I was present on every date,
fluttering and witnessing everything lovely and intimate.
Photo Prompt- Magpie Tales- Mag 255

To accept the stark reality I wasn't ready,
when he abandoned his wife & went after another lady.

PHOTO PROMPT - Copyright Ted Strutz
Photo Prompt - Copyright Ted Strutz Friday Fictioneers
Unplugging his life-source, I killed him & became a murderer,
as I felt this world can do without another philanderer.

When solitude knocks at my door,
the writer in me can't take the weight of my character's murder any more,
nor his wife's lonely cries and anguish in store...


Does writing make you feel guilty sometimes? Do share in the comments below.

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IndiSpire Edition#49- Solitude
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92 comments:

  1. Ananya29 January 2015 at 12:12

    Beautifully Written

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  2. Uppal29 January 2015 at 12:13

    Kamaal kar diya, Anita !!! Love your creation!

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  3. Indrani29 January 2015 at 12:55

    Very well conceived thought.
    Good one.

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  4. Amrita Sabat29 January 2015 at 13:11

    very nicely written! I got the feelin of U being R.K.Laxman's common man...! Coz U r d butterfly watching every scene, just like the common man is there as witness in every of Laxman's cartoons! :)

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 17:42

      Oh Wow! Thanks for such a profound thought! I love R.K. Laxman & his Common Man.
      Thank you so much for this :)

      I meant to convey that the Writer is present on every page & with every little thing that happens with her characters...

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  5. Tomichan Matheikal29 January 2015 at 13:22

    Who is the actual butterfly: the narrator or the husband?

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 17:45

      Good question :)
      The narrator i.e. the Writer is present everywhere, on every page just like a butterfly tries to make it to every flower!
      Wish husbands are loyal, and certainly not butterflies :D

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  6. Susan Anderson29 January 2015 at 13:25

    Never feel guilty. It's all about the story!

    =)

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 17:46

      Thanks for the tip, Susan!
      It's important not be be emotionally carried away!

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  7. Haddock29 January 2015 at 13:28

    this reminds me of a friend who told me recently "we Indians are very good at feeling guilty"

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 17:52

      I guess we feel guilty easily if we are emotional, think a lot & take the blame on ourselves. There are many who blame others when things go wrong :)
      I feel- Anyone around the world, who's very sensitive & an emotional-fool, may feel guilty! :)

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  8. Locomente29 January 2015 at 13:56

    Aww... This is very wonderfully written and expressed!

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  9. Ravish Mani29 January 2015 at 14:20

    Anita, I'm little confused whether it's a story or poetry. Superbly written. It is something only you can do it beautifully. It also reminds me of your previous story something about couple visiting painting of their own. Same writing style. Kudos :)

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 17:56

      Thanks for your extremely kind words, Ravish :)
      Nice that you remember a previous Story-Poem so well too! It was "Tattoo Love Story"- about reincarnation! :)

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  10. Unknown29 January 2015 at 14:27

    wow....soul sis...super use of prompts and ek teer se kitne sheekar :) Superb...theme...story line and words muahhh

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 17:57

      Thanks for your generous appreciation, Soul-sis :)
      Delighted that you liked it!

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  11. Aayesha S Hakim29 January 2015 at 15:12

    Sometimes, writing what depresses you makes you feel guilty. Don't stop in the middle of the pain. Keep going. Flush that shit out!

    You're a 'prompt' queen, Anita! :)

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 18:03

      I agree with you, Aayesha!
      I have cried a lot while reading the news & while writing especially about bomb-attacks, accidents, injustice etc.
      Not getting involved is the solution. But. I cannot stop doing so, as I consider it my responsibility to express & share.

      Thank you so much for this amazing title! I promptly feel important! :)

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  12. Linda Kay29 January 2015 at 19:26

    We do live with our characters, don't we? A fellow writer says that one of the joys of writing is that we can create a character and do what we want with him/her. That is true! Great job, Anita.

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 22:02

      Yes, passionate writers do, Linda! How true! I agree with your words & your fellow writer's too.
      Writing puts us in charge of the lives of our characters! Better be responsible :)

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  13. Someone is Special29 January 2015 at 20:30

    Beautiful poem. Happy to see someone multi-prompt (I used to write for 10 prompts in a single post). And to your question, I never feel guilty :)

    Someone is Special

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 22:04

      Thanks a lot for your appreciation & for sharing, Sarav :)
      That's lovely to learn! 10 prompts is something!
      I love to combine prompts as I find it challenging :)

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  14. Anonymous29 January 2015 at 20:51

    Love the end. Very well etched tale of poem meeting fiction:)

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  15. Rat29 January 2015 at 21:52

    when i write, i feel myself. so no guilt at all.. amazing use of prompts.. :) :)

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 22:07

      That's lovely, Meera!
      It's a lesson- write & feel ourselves & NOT feel guilty :)
      Thanks!

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  16. Rocky Mountain Woman29 January 2015 at 22:08

    I feel like I can abandon guilt and pain to a certain degree by putting it on paper...

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    1. Anita Sabat29 January 2015 at 22:12

      Welcome to my Blog! Thanks for commenting :)
      Yes, sharing our thoughts can be cathartic & writers can abandon a lot...

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  17. Anonymous29 January 2015 at 23:35

    a writer with a conscience. well done.

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  18. www.lifepartneracademy.com29 January 2015 at 23:39

    Vow! You are truly creative. Your imagination is wonderful and this small poem is very thought provoking Anita.

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    1. Anita Sabat30 January 2015 at 19:12

      Thanks for your kind words :) Delighted that you liked it.

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  19. Amrit Sinha30 January 2015 at 00:37

    I loved your take of a writer feeling guilty ... very different :-)

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  20. Carrie Van Horn30 January 2015 at 01:04

    How thought provoking Anita! Writing does not make me feel guilty, but I do feel like I am a taker sometimes. I watch and take observations, and take from passers by what I will. So a think in some ways a writer is a taker of what is around them.

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    1. Anita Sabat30 January 2015 at 19:15

      Thanks for sharing your views, Carrie.
      Even I feel so. Yes, writers are great observers & do benefit from the world :)

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  21. Su-sieee! Mac30 January 2015 at 05:16

    The character had to be horrible to deserve being killed. Very chilling writing.

    Have I ever felt guilty writing? I probably have when I was younger and felt to believe writing was something from which you can't make a living.

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    1. Anita Sabat30 January 2015 at 19:16

      Thanks for stopping by & reading.
      Thanks for sharing & for your appreciation :)

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  22. Aunt Mary30 January 2015 at 08:30

    Lovely poetry, I really liked your beautiful poem:)

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  23. Maria Mainero30 January 2015 at 09:26

    I have such a hard time letting some of my characters get the punishment they deserve.

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    1. Anita Sabat30 January 2015 at 19:18

      Truly Maria :)
      I feel happy that I can ensure justice :)

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  24. Alok Vats30 January 2015 at 11:41

    Nice post Anita

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  25. Renu Vyas30 January 2015 at 23:35

    So creative and well written Anita ! :)

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  26. brudberg31 January 2015 at 03:06

    I think that even philanderer deserves not to be electrocuted.

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    1. Anita Sabat31 January 2015 at 08:06

      The society is kind to men, Bjorn!
      Had the woman been the cheating-partner, would she have received your support?
      I hope & wish no one cheats their spouse ever...

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    2. brudberg19 February 2015 at 18:58

      Indeed.. :-) I

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  27. Anonymous31 January 2015 at 08:22

    Yes, sometimes I feel guilty writing…

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    1. Anita Sabat31 January 2015 at 12:27

      Thank you so much for sharing your views :)
      In those times we must write better things :)

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  28. Anonymous31 January 2015 at 15:42

    splendid!

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  29. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields31 January 2015 at 18:57

    Dear Anita,

    Many times I've felt the remorse of killing off characters, but they were justifiable homicides.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Anita Sabat2 February 2015 at 10:22

      Thanks for sharing your views, Rochelle :)
      Nice to be in charge to ensure justice :)

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  30. Bekkie Sanchez31 January 2015 at 21:57

    Very thought provoking! I never feel bad killing off my characters but many of them are not good guys. <3

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    1. Anita Sabat2 February 2015 at 10:28

      Thanks for sharing, Bekkie. At least in our writings we can ensure justice for good people & punishment for the not-so-good :)

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  31. Patricia1 February 2015 at 08:56

    Great story, Anita. The emotions in the piece are powerful. Thanks for joining, In Other Words, this week. Hope to see you again.

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    1. Anita Sabat2 February 2015 at 10:30

      Thanks a lot for your appreciation, Patricia.
      It's my pleasure to join. Thanks for the opportunity :)

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  32. Josie Two Shoes1 February 2015 at 09:43

    I do enjoy giving characters dark sides or killing one off now and then, we can't do that in real life! My husband shakes his head at me doing that, and some of my readers are uncomfortable, but for me it is an act of creativity, role-play. Your story was very moving!

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    1. Anita Sabat2 February 2015 at 10:33

      Very true, Josie. Thanks for sharing. Yes, as writers we exercise great powers!
      "With greats powers come great responsibilities" :)
      Delighted that you liked my story :)

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  33. Ashish Kumar2 February 2015 at 23:33

    wonderful creation... awesome piece of writing... A "writer's write up" indeed...

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    1. Anita Sabat3 February 2015 at 02:26

      Thanks for your wonderful words, Ashish! Means a lot from a fellow-writer :)

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  34. debajyoti3 February 2015 at 03:32

    even i like it :)
    you are a versatile writer!

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    1. Anita Sabat3 February 2015 at 07:52

      Thanks for your appreciation & recognition, Deb :) Means a lot :)

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  35. Sindhu Devi K3 February 2015 at 16:57

    Wonderful story, Anita :) He deserves that!

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    1. Anita Sabat19 February 2015 at 20:41

      Glad you liked it, Sindhu!
      In this world, only a few get what they deserve :)

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  36. Sumana Roy19 February 2015 at 13:27

    ouch...isn't killing a bit too much...but it's needed sometimes...great lines Anita :)

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    1. Anita Sabat19 February 2015 at 20:43

      Some writers suffer when they kill characters :)
      Thanks Sumanaji :)

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  37. alan170419 February 2015 at 16:07

    Very different and the unique feeling of murder is certainly a raging passion. This works really well.

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    1. Anita Sabat19 February 2015 at 20:44

      Thanks for stopping by. Glad you liked it, Alan!

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  38. Brian Miller19 February 2015 at 19:22

    yikes...ha...what a story you created...
    and hopefully we dont have to kill anyone
    to be alone...smiles

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    1. Anita Sabat19 February 2015 at 20:45

      Appreciate your appreciation, Brian :)
      Thanks! Keep smiling :)

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  39. Mary20 February 2015 at 07:32

    Ah, when solitude knocks at one's door...hmmm, the enigma is whether to answer or not. Quite a tale here.

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    1. Anita Sabat20 February 2015 at 12:49

      Yes, that's the dilemma, Mary :) Thanks for reading!

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  40. Gabriella20 February 2015 at 07:35

    This is quite a story, Anita. I am sure he did not expect such an ending.

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    1. Anita Sabat20 February 2015 at 12:50

      He was the character. She was the author.
      She never knew what she'd suffer after murdering him :)

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  41. Eileen T O'Neill .....20 February 2015 at 17:57

    Anita,

    A wonderful response to the prompt...I never thought of using a character to express the emotion of solitude and being lonely. You have given a great example of both situations, after the crimes of passion!!

    Eileen

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    1. Anita Sabat24 February 2015 at 20:25

      Thanks for the appreciation, Eileen :)
      Words can affect us emotionally & mentally.

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  42. Cifar21 February 2015 at 13:28

    nicely thought and executed , you have mastered the multiple prompt combining in your writing

    Loneliness

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    1. Anita Sabat24 February 2015 at 20:26

      Glad you liked my attempt, Cifar! Thanks for your nice words!

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  43. Margaret22 February 2015 at 02:51

    Jealousy and revenge fuel many a novel… you are not alone. :)

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    1. Anita Sabat24 February 2015 at 20:27

      Thanks for stopping by & sharing, Margaret :)

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  44. Unknown24 February 2015 at 00:31

    A touching story expressed through verse :) Well written, Anita!

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  45. artbyrae24 February 2015 at 11:12

    I liked the story well written

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  46. Intelliblog25 February 2015 at 08:17

    A grim story of crime and punishment, Anita. Well done!

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Your words mean a lot to me.

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