Wednesday, 23 July 2014

And They Danced In The Rain...

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He fondled her saying, "I felt a pang in my heart when you both danced in the rain..." 
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"When he ditched you, I was very angry as I have always loved you & can never see you sad, Darling!"

As they hugged, she didn’t know that he had broken the law by sabotaging her ex-lover's circuit-system that rainy-day...

He had thrown his competitor's metallic-body out as rain-water-exposure would kill him.

He had no fear as no other robot in the 25th Century had seen him committing the crime & the 20th Century stuffed Ram sitting in the corner couldn't testify... 

PHOTO PROMPT - Copyright - Adam Ickes
PHOTO PROMPT – Copyright – Adam Ickes


My 100 Words Story & Five Sentence Fiction for -
Five Sentence Fiction- Rain , Friday Fictioneers- 18 July 2014 
& ABC Wednesday - D For - Danced, Ditched, Darling...


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55 comments:

  1. Siddhartha Joshi23 July 2014 at 11:40

    Really interesting story...enjoyed its bizarreness! :)
    -- Village grocery shop in a lake

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  2. Lancelot Quadras23 July 2014 at 12:19

    Interesting.. Anita :)

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  3. Shivani Singh23 July 2014 at 12:44

    Didn't know Anita that a story can be told using just these many words...and i need to learn because i am very very over wordy....hahahaha.
    Jokes apart now tell me na seriously is there a word for this...opportunist is definitely an understatement but hey i find it really weird though. i keep seeing it in Hollywood movies. The victim a girl would be in her most miserable state of affairs and she will 'do it' with the next guy who tries to show her some consolation. Guys toh you know. They have all their emotions fixed on one spot but girls...i find that weird and i won't agree to that word 'Bizarrreness' because for me the word should be BRILLIANTO. :)

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    1. Anita Sabat23 July 2014 at 19:06

      Yes, Shivani, a few words can convey so much... Sometimes words are not needed and sometimes we can use up hundreds of pages & yet not convey what we wanna say...
      Do stick to your style. It makes you stand out & special :)

      We humans are 'emotional fools'. Most people's idea is to cash on!
      This was a story about Robots of the 25th Century where even they have emotions and break rules out of jealousy, revenge & love...
      Thanks for such lovely words :)

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  4. Anonymous23 July 2014 at 13:35

    Gripping narrative. Love is such an oxymoron and makes us do strange things.

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    1. Anita Sabat23 July 2014 at 13:41

      Thanks Vishal. Yes, love makes us go wild...

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields23 July 2014 at 13:59

    Dear Anita,

    Interesting story. A strange future that.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Anita Sabat23 July 2014 at 14:09

      Thanks for reading, Rochelle :)
      Future is now this killer gets his Darling & gets to dance in the rain with her...

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  6. Bikram23 July 2014 at 16:26

    oooh all in the name of LOVe.. that is sad Why kill someone ..

    Bikram's

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    1. Anita Sabat23 July 2014 at 19:02

      They justify by saying that- 'Everything fair in Love & War', Bikram...

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  7. Donna Burman23 July 2014 at 17:25

    Bizarre and unique Anita.. Mast! :D

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  8. Aathira23 July 2014 at 22:18

    You have combined the prompts so well, Anita. An insightful look into the future!

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  9. JANU23 July 2014 at 22:30

    A wonderful combination of all the prompts.

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  10. Ankur Anand24 July 2014 at 02:56

    bizarre pluviophile :P wonderfully combined prompt !

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    1. Anita Sabat28 July 2014 at 18:15

      Thanks Ankur :)
      Both lover of rain & lover of his Darling too :)

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  11. Rat28 July 2014 at 17:10

    short n crisp narration. Nice one

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  12. Reader Wil5 August 2014 at 21:55

    Fascinating story! You write well!
    Have a great week.
    Wil, ABCW Team

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    1. Anita Sabat5 August 2014 at 22:02

      Thanks a lot, Wil!
      You have a great week too :)

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  13. Rajesh5 August 2014 at 22:31

    Nice and interesting.

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  14. Roger Owen Green5 August 2014 at 22:47

    the stuffed ram! what a twist/
    ROG, ABCW

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  15. Leslie:6 August 2014 at 03:01

    quite the ending

    Leslie
    abcw team

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    1. Anita Sabat6 August 2014 at 08:27

      They say- 'Everything is fair in love', Leslie :)

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  16. K V V S MURTHY6 August 2014 at 05:05

    Interesting post for the letter D. Have a nice day.

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  17. Indrani6 August 2014 at 09:30

    Stuffed Ram! What an end!
    Well worded Anita. :)

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  18. K.A. Acharya6 August 2014 at 15:13

    That's an incredible use of the stuffed Ram prompt. :) Well-written story.

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  19. Shailaja V6 August 2014 at 21:54

    Three prompts in one- Science fiction. romance and suspense too! You are on fire, woman :D

    Shailaja/The Moving Quill

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  20. Anonymous7 August 2014 at 00:34

    Bizarre can be so amusing :-) Gr8!

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  21. Lmkazmierczak7 August 2014 at 08:00

    You dance with words wonderfully...♪ http://lauriekazmierczak.com/dual-duels/

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  22. Beloo Mehra8 August 2014 at 15:39

    O what a futuristic story it is! Very cool, Anita :)

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  23. Eddie Bluelights10 August 2014 at 17:26

    It's been a while since I danced in the rain . . .
    Nice story ~ Eddie :)

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    1. Anita Sabat10 August 2014 at 19:21

      Welcome to my Blog, Eddie.
      Ditto! Time to dance in the rain :)
      Thanks!

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  24. Vishal Bheeroo4 June 2016 at 13:18

    Simply brilliant:)

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  25. Unknown9 June 2016 at 19:00

    Awww. brilliant... loved the stuffed RAM bit.. LOL...

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  26. Unknown9 June 2016 at 23:14

    Aww...This was such an interesting and gripping story! :)

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  27. Bushra Muzaffar9 June 2016 at 23:48

    Very futuristic love tale :)

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  28. Maniparna10 June 2016 at 01:22

    The futuristic love...still as powerful as the present one.... :-) Nicely narrated, Anita...

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  29. D.Nambiar10 June 2016 at 05:14

    A metallic 'other man!' :)
    We're sort of in that age already, aren't we?

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  30. Indrani10 June 2016 at 20:20

    Read it again today and felt the same surprise!
    Brilliant work Anita.

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  31. Anupriya Kumari21 August 2016 at 16:11

    I never new that stories can be so short and express so many thoughts.....honestly I was surprised when I came to know that the end has come so soon....

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  32. Anupriya Kumari21 August 2016 at 16:11

    I never new that stories can be so short and express so many thoughts.....honestly I was surprised when I came to know that the end has come so soon....

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