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Friday, 27 June 2014

The Star


When she was a kid, her grandmother had taught her the first ballet steps the day her parents were killed in an accident.

Before her grandmother passed away, the old lady promised her that she would be her guardian angel and watch over her & guide her like a bright star.

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She filled the void in her life by joining the local ballet and getting fully immersed in dance, rising to be an international dancer, performing worldwide.

On new-moon nights, she often dances on her terrace, beneath the stars, hoping her parents and grandmother will see her...

She dazzles like a star on Earth as the stars in Heaven watch her starry-eyed...


My Story for Five Sentence Fiction- Dazzles
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35 comments:

  1. Red Handed27 June 2014 at 15:05

    The last line...beautiful. :)

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  2. Uma Anandane27 June 2014 at 15:37

    I second red hand...the last line makes the whole story beautiful :)

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  3. Donna Burman27 June 2014 at 16:23

    Lovely..

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  4. Soumya27 June 2014 at 17:52

    I am starry eyed too! Wonderful take on the prompt Anita! :)

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    1. Anita Sabat27 June 2014 at 22:21

      May we all have stars in our eyes, Soumya :) Thanks!

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  5. cammies on the floor27 June 2014 at 18:43

    So many sweet and loving takes on this week's prompt. Haunting as well

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    1. Anita Sabat27 June 2014 at 22:22

      Yes, I read some...beautiful entries! Great to be in great company :)

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  6. K.A. Acharya27 June 2014 at 19:46

    Beautiful story :)

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  7. Unknown27 June 2014 at 21:34

    Beautiful story of a star on the Earth.. Let her stay blessed :)

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    1. Anita Sabat27 June 2014 at 22:23

      Thanks Priya :) Amen! May God bless us all!

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  8. Shilpa Gupte27 June 2014 at 22:21

    That was truly beautiful....esp. the last line....very touching!

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    1. Anita Sabat27 June 2014 at 22:24

      Thanks a lot, Shilpa :) Delighted that you liked it!

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  9. Ankur Anand28 June 2014 at 00:58

    last line was so touching .. beautiful story :)

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  10. Unknown28 June 2014 at 09:34

    Nice take on the prompt.

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  11. Anupama K. Mazumder28 June 2014 at 15:32

    Very touching.

    www.volatilespirits.com

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  12. Anonymous29 June 2014 at 00:29

    She dances on terrace hoping her parents would see her... this is touching! Beautifully described !

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  13. Aathira29 June 2014 at 01:55

    I agree with Red, the last line adds charm to the story. Simply beautiful, Anita!

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  14. Soumyaa Verma29 June 2014 at 23:22

    I too found the last to be the cherry here. Wonderful imagination, Anita :)

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    1. Anita Sabat30 June 2014 at 00:12

      Thanks Soumyaa :)
      Compared to the tales everyone else has spun, mine is a simple & straightforward take :)

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  15. Cifar30 June 2014 at 11:32

    great story

    The Lone Survivor

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  16. Ankita 30 June 2014 at 16:36

    very touching, sometimes we always feel the presence of the departed beloveds around us.

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    1. Anita Sabat30 June 2014 at 18:04

      True Ankita. They are our guardian angels :)

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  17. Tina Basu30 June 2014 at 18:04

    Such a wonderful & touching tale. Its true, I guess, that you have a guardian angel up there somewhere.. may be sometimes - I feel :)
    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

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  18. Seeta1 July 2014 at 09:06

    Agree with Red.. the last line was indeed beautiful:)

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