Friday, 20 June 2014

The Intriguing Connivance

She whispered her question to him intrigued, "How did you land up here?" 

 He answered, "I missed you every second and have looked for you everywhere my love!"

When they appeared out of nowhere and asked her, "Do you know him?", she vehemently denied claiming, "This is the first time I'm meeting him!"

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Later, while he and everyone else was asleep, she parted with her savings as she connived with a boatman to take him away very far as she wanted him to live...

As she watched the boat carrying him drifting away from her, the strong part in her made her race behind it to catch up with him...

My Story for Five Sentence Fiction- Fenced & Three Word Wednesday

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37 comments:

  1. Ankur Anand20 June 2014 at 22:49

    life *sigh * .. nicely said :)

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  2. Old Egg21 June 2014 at 09:17

    I loved this short piece of writing, how enticing it was. I so much wanted a longer version to pad it out and to experience the chemistry between them in detail.

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:13

      Thanks for visiting my Blog & for sharing such nice words of encouragement. I feel blessed.
      Need to think of another story to do justice :)

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  3. Anonymous21 June 2014 at 18:19

    Very sad, will she see be able to catch him? Hope so.

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:16

      Thanks for stopping by & commenting :)
      There's a saying in Hindi- "Ummeed pe duniya kaayam hai"- It means- "The world survives on hope."
      Let us hope for the best & for a happy ending :)

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  4. Donna B. McNicol21 June 2014 at 20:22

    So sad, you wonder about the whole story behind their relationship.

    D.B. McNicol
    Romance & Mystery...writing my life

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:22

      Donna, Their story should have a happy ending as I hope & believe our heroine will catch up with the hero :)
      Thanks for reading!

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  5. Anonymous21 June 2014 at 20:40

    Love the expressions made alive in this beautiful fiction very well etched. There is love, longing and what's not-a tale making me smile and enthralling piece:)

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:23

      Thanks Vishal for such lovely words :) Glad you loved it!

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  6. Vinodini21 June 2014 at 23:16

    Crisp writing Anita! Nice :)

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:25

      Thanks Vinodini for reading :) Glad you liked it :)

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  7. Unknown21 June 2014 at 23:17

    Torn between loyalties. Good writing.

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:28

      Picking the right course of action is tough...
      Thanks Janaki for reading & for the appreciation :)

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  8. Aayesha S Hakim22 June 2014 at 12:34

    Oh God! I wonder so many things before and after this!
    It was enticing, Anita :)
    Glad to read you after so many days! :)

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:32

      Thanks Aayesha! Always lovely to hear from you :)
      There's a before and happily-ever-after story :)

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  9. Sindhu Devi K22 June 2014 at 17:33

    You are a talented lady! How many stories! Every story is so different! Very well written Anita...

    TC! Keep smiling :)

    Best Wishes,
    Sindhu
    Tantu
    The Arts & Me

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:34

      Thanks for such kind words, Sindhu :) They keep me going! :)
      Thanks to being with people like you, the effect of good, talented company has rubbed off on me :) :)

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  10. cammies on the floor22 June 2014 at 21:12

    Intriguing, and hopefully expanded upon

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:36

      Thanks for stopping by & commenting :) Welcome to my Blog!
      Need to plan a sequel :)

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  11. Unknown22 June 2014 at 21:29

    Interesting story!

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  12. Bikram22 June 2014 at 22:00

    hmmm all to keep the love safe ... we have to lie too sometimes ..

    Bikram

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:38

      Right observation, Bikram.
      Love is precious & they say- 'Everything is fair in love & war'. Lying is also allowed :P

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  13. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 16:24

    True Ashwini. Love makes us do many things- some rational, some irrational- anything to make our loved ones happy...
    Thanks :)

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  14. Tina Basu23 June 2014 at 19:41

    So sad, but nicely done Anita
    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

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    1. Anita Sabat23 June 2014 at 21:48

      Thanks Tina. Not so sad as she follows him :)

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  15. Uma23 June 2014 at 22:03

    Oh, I want to know more..what happened before and what happened next? Nicely done, Anita!

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    1. Anita Sabat24 June 2014 at 13:40

      Thanks Uma :) Need to present the story that's in my head :)

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  16. kalpana solsi23 June 2014 at 23:11

    There is lot of hope. Hope the lady is able to catch up with him.

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    1. Anita Sabat24 June 2014 at 13:41

      Yes, we hope that! Hope is so wonderful, Kalpanaji :)

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  17. Rat26 June 2014 at 00:04

    wonderful piece.. very well expressed.. hope she catches up with him :)

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  18. Saru Singhal26 June 2014 at 19:55

    You know I read it twice to soak the beauty of your writing. :)

    I don't recall the name of this Deepti Naval movie where she plays a painter from Nepal, your post strike similar emotions of strange ways of life.

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    1. Anita Sabat26 June 2014 at 20:06

      I read your comment twice to soak in the beauty! :) Thanks Saru :)

      I haven't watched this Deepti Naval movie. But, sounds interesting!

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  19. Beloo Mehra27 June 2014 at 13:40

    Intriguing story, Anita :) Would have liked to know more about the characters...make it at least a 1000-word story! It definitely has the potential.

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    1. Anita Sabat27 June 2014 at 14:15

      Thanks Beloo for the encouragement.
      I have written Parts-2 & 3 too. Do check them out :)

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