Saturday, 31 May 2014

Just Married

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When their eyes met, it was love at first sight.

Love doesn't mean marriage or seems right...

Marriage of Religions?! They can only fight...

Society was busy rioting & killing that night,

The couple got united as their souls took flight.

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My Story-Poem for- Five Sentence Fiction - Marriage

 & 100 Words Fiction
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52 comments:

  1. Rat31 May 2014 at 12:17

    Quite thoughtful. Good one.. as usual.

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  2. Reema D'souza31 May 2014 at 13:09

    Beautiful!

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  3. kalpana solsi31 May 2014 at 13:22

    Society was busy rioting..............

    this is so apt. Society objects to love .

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:11

      True Kalpanaji. Especially if different Religions are involved...

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  4. The Enchantress31 May 2014 at 13:47

    awesomeee

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  5. KParthasarathi31 May 2014 at 13:58

    OMG,they got united when their souls took flight.
    Seems sad ending

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:14

      Yes, Sir! It's open to what we like to think...
      They got killed and then escaped from the hell or maybe they eloped & got married...

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  6. Ankur Anand31 May 2014 at 15:50

    sweet yet thoughtful ! society always oppose every forward independent step not only love marriage :(

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  7. Anonymous31 May 2014 at 16:34

    Marriage of two souls, embedded into each other..so beautiful expressed..oh! I hate that society who survives on prejudices who boost their own ego:

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:15

      Thanks Vishal for your sweet words. Yes, true...

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  8. Aathira31 May 2014 at 19:14

    Awesome take on the prompt Anita!

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  9. JANU31 May 2014 at 19:18

    Short and sweet.

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  10. Donna Burman31 May 2014 at 21:59

    Lovely!! :D

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  11. Donna B. McNicol31 May 2014 at 22:00

    Eerie and very well done..

    D.B. McNicol
    Romance & Mystery...writing my life

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:17

      Welcome to my Blog, Donna :)
      Thanks a lot! Delighted :)

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  12. Soumyaa Verma31 May 2014 at 22:43

    Such a heart warming ending! Well formed :)

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:18

      Glad you liked it! Welcome to my space, Soumyaa :)

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  13. Anonymous31 May 2014 at 23:08

    I love how you made those work together. I think it was a happy ending, but love that it is open to interpretation.

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:19

      Welcome to my Blog, Annehiga!
      True. You have captured the essence :)

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  14. Alice Audrey31 May 2014 at 23:16

    Rioting society might be troubling, but it's still a sweet ending.

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:20

      Thanks Alice :) Wish there were no Riots, & only Sweet life & endings...

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  15. Anonymous1 June 2014 at 03:22

    Beautiful poem, Anita! I can't help but be reminded of what's been in the news lately - the consequences for women who married against their family's wish.

    Lily

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:23

      Thanks Lily! Welcome here :)
      That's the truth... people who flout rules are punished...

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  16. sun1 June 2014 at 03:53

    finding love and overcoming obstacles despite societal problems. a wonderful thing!

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:24

      Thanks for stopping by! Lovely to get your maiden comment :)
      Sometimes, people have to pay heavy costs for love...

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  17. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields1 June 2014 at 05:33

    Dear Anita,

    A lot of conflict for them to overcome. Nicely done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:25

      Thanks Rochelle! As long as it's a happy ending, all is well :)

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  18. Beloo Mehra1 June 2014 at 11:22

    A lot said in a very few words! Well done, Anita :)

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  19. Unknown1 June 2014 at 11:39

    simple but beautiful

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:26

      Thanks Prasanth for commenting. Great that you stopped by :)

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  20. Unknown1 June 2014 at 17:54

    wow... so much feeling in so few words.... Beautiful...

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 19:28

      Thanks a lot for visiting & sharing your maiden comment on my Blog!
      Delighted that you liked it!

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  21. Bikram1 June 2014 at 22:09

    this is so beautiful ... warm post

    and may they live happily married ever after ..

    Bikram

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    1. Anita Sabat1 June 2014 at 23:29

      Thanks Bikram for your kind words & warm wishes.
      May everyone receive such blessings!

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  22. Unknown3 June 2014 at 01:44

    What a warm, loving post. A lot or=f emotion in those few words. xx

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  23. Anonymous3 June 2014 at 05:54

    Delightful! Much said in less than 100 words, Alicia

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    1. Anita Sabat4 June 2014 at 21:32

      Thanks a lot for sharing your comment :) You mean- Anita :)

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  24. P.S. Joshi3 June 2014 at 16:59

    Anita, Good story and also unfortunately true for some. Well written. : ) ---Susan

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    1. Anita Sabat4 June 2014 at 21:33

      Yes indeed! Thanks for the appreciation :)

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  25. Anonymous3 June 2014 at 23:35

    Short and sweet this one, although I'm trying to decide if the ending is happy or hopelessly sad...

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    1. Anita Sabat4 June 2014 at 21:35

      Thanks! Let us take the positive :)
      Ending is happy when the lovers unite, in this life or the next...
      I believe there's a happy ending & if the end isn't happy, it's not the end!!! :)

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  26. Anonymous5 June 2014 at 12:12

    Crisp and perfect blend of the prompts, Anita :)

    Shailaja's FSF

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  27. Aayesha S Hakim22 June 2014 at 12:47

    Oh no :( The sad ending :/
    A different take on the prompt!

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    1. Anita Sabat30 July 2014 at 11:37

      Aayesha, it's a happy ending as the souls of the lovers unite.
      Riots are sad...

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